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Old 01-02-2005, 20:31:10   #22
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I liked it Allie- considering the pretentious wank/illiterate drivel most 16 year olds write, I think you've actually got a very mature and writerly tone going. Reminded me very much of Mills and Boon- which is a compliment because once you start one of those books, you CANNOT PUT IT DOWN!! And they are actually very skilled at getting a lot of information into a small space.

I think K-G raised a valid point in that you were writing about yourself, but I think thats where most people start, and gradually you learn to divorce your characters from you. I disagree with Laz about too much back story, I thought it was just enough. You do need to illustrate the main character a little more, but basically, top marks girlie!
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