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The Mad Monk
23-05-2005, 21:22:11
Three weeks, no interviews, one rejuection letter.

OBJECTIVE Find a challenging position where my broad experience
would be put to good use.


EXPERIENCE Caschem, Bayonne, NJ (hired through Lab Support,
Piscataway, NJ)
Quality Control Technician, August 2000 to March 2005

Tested in process, final product, and raw material samples to
assure that quality specs were met, as sole technician on shift. Also
did R&D and special testing as required.
Standardized titrants as needed. Calibrated and maintained an
assortment of laboratory equipment, including viscometers, specific
gravity meters, analytical balances, and Karl Fisher titrators.
Maintained in process and final sample archives.

International Technidyne Corporation, Edison, NJ (via Lab
Support, Piscataway, NJ)
Quality Assurance Coordinator, August 1998 to December 1999

Ensured the proper and timely conclusion of all instrument and
incision device complaints.
Assembled ISO compliant documentation for new products.
Coordinated different departments to ensure the smooth operation of the
complaint system.
Trended complaint data to find problem areas and recommend possible
solutions.

Lipton, Englewood Cliffs, NJ (via Lab Support, Elmwood Park NJ)
Spec Scientist, May 1998 to July 1998
Culinary (Sauces) Division, Quality Systems Group

Evaluated and entered formulation data for Ragu, Five Brothers,
and other assorted pasta sauces into the Xspec database system.
Assisted in the composition of a userís manual for Xspec.
Created new specifications.

Instrumentation Laboratories, Orangeburg, NY (via Lab Support,
White Plains, NY)
Data Analyst, March 1998 to May 1998

Interpreted, entered, and correlated raw data for use in
automation of a freeze-drying process for blood products.
Created automated spreadsheets and graphs for use in tracking the
quality of blood gas testing reagents.

Wyeth Ayerst Lederle, Pearl River, NY (via Lab Support, Elmwood
Park, NJ)
Technical Writer, November 1997 to March 1998
esilederle Formulation Group

Composed Study Plans, Study Results, SOIs, and Interim Reports.
Transcribed Memoranda. PC support for Formulations Group.
Developed Presentations
Created standard forms for documents.

Nabisco, East Hanover, NJ (via Lab Support, Elmwood Park, NJ)
Research Technician, August 1996 to October, 1997
SPC division, Dry Mix section. Responsibilities included

Compounded and tested product samples and prototypes.
Prepared product for analytical, micro, and shelf life studies.
Set up and ran showings and in-company sensory tests.
Ran shelf life studies and certain analytical procedures.

Merck, Rahway, NJ (via Manpower Technical Services, East
Brunswick, NJ).
Chemical Technician, March 1995 to March 1996

Prepared samples ranging from 1 mg to several kg from
collection of over 300,000 drugs and drug candidates. Handled
sensitive compounds.
Handled hazardous compounds.
Maintained inventory.

Rutgers University, Newark College of Arts and Sciences
Tutor, Fall 1993 to Fall 1994

Instructed students in chemistry, geology, and accounting.
Appraised computer teaching programs.
Trained other tutors.

Hardman, Inc., Belleville, NJ
Machine Operator Summers 1987 to 1991:

Operated and maintained packaging machines.
Operated forklifts.
Assisted in compounding epoxies, urethanes, and butyl rubbers.
Ran viscosity tests.

EDUCATION Rutgers University, Newark College of Arts and Sciences
Majored in Geology (incomplete)
Minors in Chemistry, Physics, and Accounting.
Graduate level courses in Geology


SPECIAL SKILLS Chemistry: Experienced in using lab equipment
including analytical balances, penetrometers, Brookfield viscometers,
pH meters, FTIR, NIR, and UV spectrometers, GCs, Hunter Lab Scan II
Colorimeters, Sieve Analysis (ROTAP), Anton Paar density meters,
Mettler Karl Fisher titrators, and an assortment of wet chemistry and
other laboratory procedures, including but not limited to acid value,
hydroxyl value, saponification number, unsaponifiable matter, iodine
value, %soap, %NCO, % volatiles, melt point (capillary and drop), gel
time (dry stick and Brookfield), and heavy metals.

Computer: Uses MS Word and MS Excel regularly, have used PowerPoint
and Access on occasion. Some experience with Paint Shop Pro and
Photoshop. Learns new software quickly. Builds own computers.

General: Basic mechanical, electrical, and carpentry skills. Basic
first aid skills. Experienced with forklifts, hand jacks, powerjacks,
drum dollies and hoists.


CERTIFICATIONS Nationally certified by the College Reading and
Learning Association as a tutor.

References are available on request.

The basic form hasn't changed since I pout it together back in the early ninties, and it's always worked before.

It also looks much nicer in it's native format.

Any suggestions?

Japher
23-05-2005, 21:34:35
When did you graduate from college?

The Mad Monk
23-05-2005, 21:36:13
I didn't.

Japher
23-05-2005, 21:40:53
That could be one problem. What does it say to someone who didn't graduate but was persuing 3 minors?

Are you currently going to school? Also, what kind of job are you looking for, do want to continue to do lab work?

If you aren't still going to school, when did you stop?

Japher
23-05-2005, 21:41:48
Also, were you ever promoted in any of your positions?

Provost Harrison
23-05-2005, 21:42:44
Have you ever done any chromatography TMM?

Japher
23-05-2005, 21:44:28
Ah, PH is here, someone who can really doctor up that resume;)

Venom
23-05-2005, 21:45:48
I've been told that if you can explain how your experience/position was important and what it saved the company that it can help.

Provost Harrison
23-05-2005, 21:48:42
As a QA bod it is concerning that what you have done on your CV looks completely and utterly routine without anything challenging, any deviation from the norm. Have you participated in any projects, perhaps also involving some kind of liason with production, solved problems or found massive savings in efficiency and time? Think of things like that, because they look good for this kind of thing. I know if I was hiring someone where I work for a QA job I would be interested in this kind of stuff as well as your bench skills.

Japher
23-05-2005, 21:49:24
What I want to do is try and weed out some of the work experience. Especially the earlier temp positions as I think it might look odd when compared to the fact that MM has been in the same position for over 5 years, which is really good and should be highlighted. Also, I am trying to accent his work skills, removing some that don't matter to the position will increase the relevance of those that do. I also think the tutor certification is relevant because it shows that he can work well with morons. Also, the objective is a little too general, so it would help to know what kind of position MM is looking for.

Not a bad resume, just a little scary at first glance, which is all you get from an HR dweeb... Also, trying to add in Keywords.

The Mad Monk
23-05-2005, 21:51:18
Originally posted by Japher
That could be one problem. What does it say to someone who didn't graduate but was persuing 3 minors?

Are you currently going to school? Also, what kind of job are you looking for, do want to continue to do lab work?

If you aren't still going to school, when did you stop?

Killing the minors, except chem, is probably a good idea.

I could no longer afford to go to school back in '95 (yes, its been ten years), and one of the specific courses I needed to complete my degree is a field course I could never find time to do once I started supporting myself.

I'd like to continue doing lab work, it's what I know. I'd prefer to get back into food science, but anything not overly pungeant will do.

Japher
23-05-2005, 22:01:06
I could no longer afford to go to school back in '95 (yes, its been ten years), and one of the specific courses I needed to complete my degree is a field course I could never find time to do once I started supporting myself.


So, how many years would you have had left? That may be a good thing to put down.

Was it a BA or a BS you were working towards?

Sir Penguin
23-05-2005, 22:01:27
Hardman, Inc., Belleville, NJ
:lol:

I think Japher's right that you need to cut some of the older work experience. Use the extra space to put all your paragraph lists into bullet format, which is a lot easier to read and looks better. Whitespace use is vey important.

It would help if we had the document in its native format.

SP

The Mad Monk
23-05-2005, 22:05:14
MY last job was challenging, but it's hard to describe how in a resume.

The workload was high, tolerances were tight, and the variety of products was excessive. here were about two dozen procedures you had to know by heart and execute quickly and accurately, and probably a good twenty more that you had to remember with a minimum of prompting.

New people were given twelve weeks to learn the position, and were booted if they couldn't learn it by then. We went through eight people in one year that way alone, and they were the best we could find. Average tenure for a tech there was a little over a year.

The Mad Monk
23-05-2005, 22:06:27
Originally posted by Japher
So, how many years would you have had left? That may be a good thing to put down.

Was it a BA or a BS you were working towards?

Less than a year, and a BA.

The Mad Monk
23-05-2005, 22:09:42
Originally posted by Sir Penguin
:lol:

I think Japher's right that you need to cut some of the older work experience. Use the extra space to put all your paragraph lists into bullet format, which is a lot easier to read and looks better. Whitespace use is vey important.

It would help if we had the document in its native format.

SP

It's a Word document in table format with bullets and everything. It doubled as a statement that I could use Word better than your average chimp. ;)

I don't think it will fit under the upload limit.

Japher
23-05-2005, 22:10:06
Besides ISO what other quality systems have you worked in or with? GLP, FDA, CFR?

Provost Harrison
23-05-2005, 22:10:15
Originally posted by The Mad Monk
MY last job was challenging, but it's hard to describe how in a resume.

The workload was high, tolerances were tight, and the variety of products was excessive. here were about two dozen procedures you had to know by heart and execute quickly and accurately, and probably a good twenty more that you had to remember with a minimum of prompting.

New people were given twelve weeks to learn the position, and were booted if they couldn't learn it by then. We went through eight people in one year that way alone, and they were the best we could find. Average tenure for a tech there was a little over a year.

That is harsh, our lab only deals with three product lines and I deal with two (although there is an exhaustive amount of testing on each as we deal with APIs). To get used to 24 and master them would take a very, very long time!

The Mad Monk
23-05-2005, 22:17:32
ISO is the only one I have significant experience with.

We had some FDA-mandated requirements, but other than specific USP procedures I couldn't tell you what they were.

Lazarus and the Gimp
23-05-2005, 22:23:56
Times change. Reword your objective to "Will work for food".

Japher
23-05-2005, 22:27:31
Here's what I would do:


OBJECTIVE: To obtain a position as a [INSERT POSITION TITLE HERE] that would utilize my 10+ years of experience testing and analyzing analytical assays as well as my understanding of data management systems.

EXPERIENCE CasChem, Bayonne, NJ
Quality Control Technician, August 2000 to March 2005

Performed in-process, final product, and raw material assays to assure product conformity to quality specifications
Supported Research and Development efforts on an ongoing basis
Calibrated and maintained an assortment of laboratory equipment, including viscometers, specific
gravity meters, analytical balances, and Karl Fisher titration devices.
Maintained in process and final sample archives.

International Technidyne Corporation, Edison, NJ
Quality Assurance Coordinator, August 1998 to December 1999

Ensured the proper and timely conclusion of all instrument and incision device complaints.
Compiled documentation for new products according to ISO quality standards
Coordinated interdepartmental communication to ensure the smooth operation of complaint systems.
Trended complaint data to find problem areas and recommend possible solutions.

Lab Support, Various Locations
Various Positions, March 1995 to July 1998

Correlated, evaluated and data based formulation data for brand name food, pharmaceutical, and blood products
Developed and/or Wrote new product specifications, process documentation, process monitoring plans, study plans, SOIs, Interim Reports, and Presentations
Compounded and tested product samples and prototypes
Supplied computer support and training

Rutgers University, Newark College of Arts and Sciences
Tutor, Fall 1993 to Fall 1994

Instructed students in chemistry, geology, and accounting.
Appraised computer-teaching programs.
Training of other tutors

SKILLS General chemistry experience, hazardous and sensitive material handling, working knowledge of lab equipment including analytical balances, penetrometers, Brookfield viscometers, pH meters, FTIR, NIR, and UV spectrometers, GCs, Hunter Lab Scan II
Colorimeters, Sieve Analysis (ROTAP), Anton Paar density meters, Mettler Karl Fisher titrators, and an assortment of wet chemistry and other laboratory procedures, including but not limited to acid value, hydroxyl value, saponification number, unsaponifiable matter, iodine value, %soap, %NCO, % volatiles, melt point (capillary and drop), gel time (dry stick and Brookfield), and heavy metals.

Computer: MSOffice, World Wide Web programs, Xspec, [LIST AS MANY RELEVENT SW PROGRAMS YOU CAN THINK OF THAT YOU KNOW HOW TO USE, OR HAVE USED IN THE PAST] various other software, competent with computer hardware

CERTIFICATIONS Nationally certified by the College Reading and
Learning Association as a tutor.

EDUCATION Rutgers University, Newark College of Arts and Sciences
Major in Geology (3 of 4 years completed)
Minor in Chemistry

References are available on request.


Made your OBJECTIVE a little more precise, removed how you got the positions you have had, changed the wording on some of the job duties, removed some duties that would be implied, consolodated temp positions, removed some irrelevant jobs, added some job responsibilities to SKILLS, removed GENERAL SKILLS (could be listed as Hobbies/Interests), removed all minors but Chemistry, moved education to the end since it is not what we want to emphasize, changed "incomplete" to "3 of 4" to make it more positive and makes it appear that you want to finish if given the opportunity...

When you look at a job posting I would recommend identifying keywords and making sure they are in your resume IF you have said experience.

There's probably more you can do. You have a lot to do with quality issues, maybe add that to the objective.

The Mad Monk
23-05-2005, 22:36:58
Oh, that looks good. I have some work to do. Thanks!

Sir Penguin
23-05-2005, 23:53:09
Originally posted by The Mad Monk
It's a Word document in table format with bullets and everything. It doubled as a statement that I could use Word better than your average chimp. ;)

I don't think it will fit under the upload limit.
I was mostly talking about the chemistry skills list. It would look better as a bulleted list split into two or three columns.

Email the DOC to me and I'll put it online if you'd like (nrqm at uvic dot ca).

SP

The Mad Monk
24-05-2005, 01:05:02
Nah, that's alright, I just realized I could upload it at Poly.

Thanks anyway. :)

fp
24-05-2005, 09:03:32
Originally posted by The Mad Monk
Nah, that's alright, I just realized I could upload it at Poly.


Uploading a Non-Civ related file? I see a banning in your future. ;)

Kitsuki
24-05-2005, 11:29:34
Put the references in - don't give potential employers more work to do than they already have to....

protein
24-05-2005, 11:44:59
the opening paragraph just says you want a job. how about opening it with something like

PROFILE

An experienced chemist with a wide range of skills and experience. Outgoing with strong and effective communication and organisational skills. Good team player and able to use own initiative to achieve objectives. Excellent knowledge of ***insert lab techniques here****. Versatile and learns new skills quickly.

protein
24-05-2005, 11:45:41
even if they just scan over that bit I'm sure it will make you seem just that littlel bit more dynamic and interesting.

MDA
24-05-2005, 11:49:53
www.usajobs.gov

search CHEMIST

Most of the jobs require a degree - but you've got plenty of work experience to balance the missing degree. Sometimes a good track record will count more than a sheepskin. It always should, really, but bureaucrats are funny people.

Venom
24-05-2005, 13:17:36
Oooh. I figured it out. The problem with your resume is that it's about you.

Chris
24-05-2005, 14:03:15
You should lie more.

The Mad Monk
24-05-2005, 15:12:59
I'm posting from bed.

MDA
24-05-2005, 16:15:43
Sounds like a great gig if it pays the bills.

Chris
24-05-2005, 16:32:10
Originally posted by The Mad Monk
I'm posting from bed. Then say you want a job on the side.

The Mad Monk
24-05-2005, 18:02:34
Originally posted by MDA
Sounds like a great gig if it pays the bills.

There's always a catch, isn't there? ;)

The Mad Monk
25-05-2005, 21:35:31
Here's the new, stripped down resume:


superdak@bellatlantic.net

OBJECTIVE
To obtain a position as a QC Chemist that would utilize my 7+ years of experience testing and analyzing analytical assays as well as my understanding of data management systems.

EXPERIENCE
Caschem, Bayonne, NJ (hired through Lab Support, Piscataway, NJ)
Quality Control Technician, August 2000 to March 2005

* Tested in process, final product, and raw material samples to assure that quality specs were met, as sole technician on shift. Also did R&D and special testing as required.
* Standardized titrants as needed.
* Calibrated and maintained an assortment of laboratory equipment, including viscometers, specific gravity meters, analytical balances, and Karl Fisher titrators.
* Maintained in process and final sample archives.

International Technidyne Corporation, Edison, NJ
Quality Assurance Coordinator, August 1998 to December 1999

* Ensured the proper and timely conclusion of all instrument and incision device complaints.
* Compiled documentation for new products according to ISO quality standards
* Coordinated interdepartmental communication to ensure the smooth operation of complaint systems.
* Trended complaint data to find problem areas and recommend possible solutions.

Lab Support, Various Locations
Various Positions, March 1995 to July 1998

* Correlated, evaluated and data based formulation data for brand name food, pharmaceutical, and blood products
* Developed and/or Wrote new product specifications, process documentation, process monitoring plans, study plans, SOIs, Interim Reports, and Presentations
* Compounded and tested product samples and prototypes
* Supplied computer support and training

Rutgers University, Newark College of Arts and Sciences
Tutor, Fall 1993 to Fall 1994

* Instructed students in chemistry, geology, and
accounting.
* Appraised computer teaching programs.
* Trained other tutors.

Hardman, Inc., Belleville, NJ
Machine Operator Summers 1987 to 1991:

* Operated and maintained packaging machines.
* Operated forklifts.
* Assisted in compounding epoxies, urethanes, and butyl rubbers.
* Ran viscosity tests.

EDUCATION
Rutgers University, Newark College of Arts and Sciences
Major in Geology (3 of 4 years completed)
Minor in Chemistry.
Graduate level courses in Geology

SPECIAL SKILLS
Chemistry: General chemistry experience, hazardous and sensitive material handling, working knowledge of lab equipment including analytical balances, penetrometers, Brookfield viscometers, pH meters, FTIR, NIR, and UV spectrometers, GCs, Hunter Lab Scan II Colorimeters, Sieve Analysis (ROTAP), Anton Paar density meters, Mettler Karl Fisher titrators, and an assortment of wet chemistry and other laboratory procedures, including but not limited to acid value, hydroxyl value, saponification number, unsaponifiable matter, iodine value, %soap, %NCO, % volatiles, melt point (capillary and drop), gel time (dry stick and Brookfield), and heavy metals.

Computer: MSOffice, MSAccess, Paint Shop Pro, Photoshop, Xspec, RenCS, Assorted Internet programs. Learns new software quickly. Builds and maintains own computers.


CERTIFICATIONS
Nationally certified by the College Reading and Learning Association as a tutor.
References are available on request.


...and here's a cover letter I just composed and sent:

Dear Sir or Madam:

I read with interest your advertisement on careerbuilder.com for the position of QC Chemist I. I believe that I would make a fine match for the position, given my experience and skills.

During my years working for Caschem, I was in charge of my shift (3rd), and responsible for all aspects of quality control on that shift. I had to insure that the lab was properly maintained, that incoming materials were dealt with, that qc results on ongoing batches were quickly and accurately reported, and that finished products were tested and approved -- or disapproved -- in a timely manner. If a $40,000 shipment was not up to spec, I made sure it did not go out the door.

I enjoyed the many experiences I had while working as a contractor for lab Support. In particular, my year as a QA coordinator for ITC gave me a lot of insight into ISO documentation preparation, as well as working with customer complaints and ensuring the proper and timely handling of customer issues between various departments. Also of note was the time I spent as a technical writer for Wyeth Ayerst-Lederle in Pearl River, NY, where I composed internal reports and FDA documentation for the esiLEDERLE Formulations Group.

As you can see from my resume, I am skilled in many kinds of wet chemical and instrument analysis. The majority of the procedures I did at Caschem were buret work; the only autotitrators in the lab were the KF machines. Caschem has a very broad range of products, covering oils, copolymers, surfactants, catalysts, and others, and most of them have ended up on my bench. I was also the "go-to guy" for the more isoteric tests, which weren't seen more than once or twice a year, due to my talent for picking up new tests quickly.

Let me finish by saying I am a motivated, hard worker, willing to work any shift, any holiday, any overtime. When a three million pound oil barge came in at 02:00 on July 4th or New Year's Eve, I was always the one standing ready to receive the sample.

I do hope to hear from you soon regarding this position.

Sincerely,


Whatcha think?

The Norks
25-05-2005, 21:41:36
better, but cut this:

Let me finish by saying I am a motivated, hard worker, willing to work any shift, any holiday, any overtime. When a three million pound oil barge came in at 02:00 on July 4th or New Year's Eve, I was always the one standing ready to receive the sample.

It makes you sound desperate, and you want to sound discriminating.

The Norks
25-05-2005, 21:44:09
I would also cut this: it happened so long ago its not relevant now (only your last three to four positions or positions within the last ten years should be shown generally)


Hardman, Inc., Belleville, NJ
Machine Operator Summers 1987 to 1991:

* Operated and maintained packaging machines.
* Operated forklifts.
* Assisted in compounding epoxies, urethanes, and butyl rubbers.
* Ran viscosity tests

The Norks
25-05-2005, 21:45:25
I would also sort this out into bullet points becaus eits just a mass of words at the moment.

SPECIAL SKILLS
Chemistry: General chemistry experience, hazardous and sensitive material handling, working knowledge of lab equipment including analytical balances, penetrometers, Brookfield viscometers, pH meters, FTIR, NIR, and UV spectrometers, GCs, Hunter Lab Scan II Colorimeters, Sieve Analysis (ROTAP), Anton Paar density meters, Mettler Karl Fisher titrators, and an assortment of wet chemistry and other laboratory procedures, including but not limited to acid value, hydroxyl value, saponification number, unsaponifiable matter, iodine value, %soap, %NCO, % volatiles, melt point (capillary and drop), gel time (dry stick and Brookfield), and heavy metals

The Mad Monk
25-05-2005, 22:01:00
Originally posted by The Norks
better, but cut this:

Let me finish by saying I am a motivated, hard worker, willing to work any shift, any holiday, any overtime. When a three million pound oil barge came in at 02:00 on July 4th or New Year's Eve, I was always the one standing ready to receive the sample.

It makes you sound desperate, and you want to sound discriminating.

...but I am desperate. :(

;)

Seriously, I like the overnight shifts, and I like overtime -- I would like to use that as a selling point.

Sir Penguin
25-05-2005, 22:30:10
I agree with AH's first issue. I think it would be better to say something like, "I am willing to work night shifts, holidays, and overtime when necessary."

As you can see from my resume, I am skilled in many kinds of wet chemical and instrument analysis. The majority of the procedures I did at Caschem were buret work; the only autotitrators in the lab were the KF machines. Caschem has a very broad range of products, covering oils, copolymers, surfactants, catalysts, and others, and most of them have ended up on my bench.
This started to sound like an advertisement for Caschem. It should focus on you, and not at the company where you worked.

I was also the "go-to guy" for the more isoteric tests, which weren't seen more than once or twice a year, due to my talent for picking up new tests quickly.
Should that be "esoteric tests"?
To obtain a position as a QC Chemist that would utilize my 7+ years of experience testing and analyzing analytical assays as well as my understanding of data management systems.
Replace "utilize" with "make use of", and don't alliterate.

Also, it's better to have an email address with your name, or something else that looks professional.

SP

The Mad Monk
26-05-2005, 15:42:52
Should that be "esoteric tests"?

...dammit.

Funko
26-05-2005, 15:57:07
on error resume next

Sir Penguin
26-05-2005, 20:45:57
Isoteric makes it sound like you really know what you're talking about.

SP

The Norks
26-05-2005, 20:54:08
Originally posted by Sir Penguin
I agree with AH's first issue. I think it would be better to say something like, "I am willing to work night shifts, holidays, and overtime when necessary."


SP

yes, saying something like 'I particularly enjoy X and would welcome the opportunity to do more of Y' puts the emphasis on what you are looking for, and makes you sound determined instead of sounding like you are so hopeless you'll do anything :)

Sir Penguin
27-05-2005, 05:19:53
But you don't want to tell them what you are looking for, you want to tell them what you can do for them.

SP