View Full Version : Comments on short story contest #5 - 'Keep off the grass'

01-10-2003, 08:07:16
Err...post your like, comments, like...here.

Story thread is here. (http://www.counterglow.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=15713)

01-10-2003, 17:57:30
Like... remember to put in link to the short story thread..

01-10-2003, 20:44:49
Submitted. Not very strong, but hey, at least I could take a few shots at posters here. :D

08-10-2003, 13:41:37
Based on a true story?

09-10-2003, 08:34:07
It will be

09-10-2003, 20:21:17

Sounds like you are expecting them to be nice this time. ;)

09-10-2003, 20:45:48
Great story, Father Bob! :D

10-10-2003, 08:51:08
He wishes it'd be that easy. ;)

10-10-2003, 13:41:50
yeah :( But Yang isn't coming, so less people to look after.

13-10-2003, 08:24:17
I should mention the deadine is going to be extended for at least another week.

I need to finish mine up at any rate and i have it on good authority there may be one or two others on the way...

13-10-2003, 10:45:25
I just wrote mine. A little underdeveloped, but I'm generally happy with it. Maybe I'll read it again sometime and see if there are any mistakes.

15-10-2003, 12:58:03
So, what were the words?

15-10-2003, 13:38:09

15-10-2003, 13:48:16
Ah, I see. I dismissed that as an option because from my perspective in the story the narrator seemed to be reading those words as he narratorates.

15-10-2003, 13:55:38
when i wrote '???' i meant 'what the fuck do you mean?' not '??? is the answer to your question'.

if you're asking what the words were that were written on the wall then you're asking for an own goal

if you're asking what the words were that were written on the wreath then they are purposefully not specfied and are not important

at the end, the narrator's mind moves from the words written on the wreath for his friend to the words he mentions at the start of the story which remind him of his friend

16-10-2003, 05:40:25
Yeah, I got lost in there somewhere. Snagged my shirt sleeve on that damn wreath.

16-10-2003, 16:32:19
I really should write something for one of these stories soon.

I've just read all the ones from this series. I like the variety of styles. K_G's story is sad, so is DaShi's in a different way both about loss but DaShi's much more subtly.

Debut from Mad Squirrel is good, I want to know what happens in the rest of that story. The dialogue kind of reminds me of Han and Leia.

16-10-2003, 16:46:29
Let me just say for the 4th time, I really want to enter one of these contests.

16-10-2003, 21:30:55
So do it, both of you lazy bums. Write an entry. Go ahead!

26-10-2003, 12:07:15
Hey KG! Get your arse in gear!

Scabrous Birdseed
29-10-2003, 13:00:37
I've written a poem. Can I post it?

Scabrous Birdseed
29-10-2003, 13:52:40
Oooh. I did. I'm so radical and different.

30-10-2003, 11:34:36
I really liked it, but why the nod to board-speak at the end? Rather spoils it for me...

30-10-2003, 11:58:32
Asshat is a universal truth.

Scabrous Birdseed
31-10-2003, 16:03:03
Originally posted by King_Ghidra
I really liked it, but why the nod to board-speak at the end? Rather spoils it for me...

Alienation device.

31-10-2003, 18:27:21
you alienated me, so it was a success

31-10-2003, 18:40:11
Then surely he must win this week's contest.

31-10-2003, 18:42:20
this week? that's a laugh, this contest has gone bi-annual

Scabrous Birdseed
31-10-2003, 19:57:25
Just substitute a more accpetable word if you like.

Chairman Yang
05-11-2003, 08:40:15
Something about Drekkus story made me feel uneasy.

05-11-2003, 20:11:34
I worte one because I was bored.

Scabrous Birdseed
05-11-2003, 20:17:35
Cool story, but I have a question: what happened in the intervening eleven days?

Immortal Wombat
06-11-2003, 23:15:54
I had an outstandingly excellent idea for a story for this thread - finally. I'd been waiting for one to come along, and it did, just as I was drifting off to sleep. I can't for the life of me remember it.

06-11-2003, 23:26:09
Immortal Wombat, you have written my biography in three sentences.:hmm:

Immortal Wombat
07-11-2003, 00:58:46
If I publish, do I have your permission to put the word "Official" on the cover?